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 Linked Tanka (Evangelion related verse) 
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Post Linked Tanka (Evangelion related verse)
I walk through dying streets
And see no other person.
The sump pump clangs on.
No bird will fly near to me
Other children look away.
I?m told I?m unique,
I have a higher purpose,
That I must focus.
To speak to the boy two seats
Over is a distraction.
It is not useful.
And picking a rose might
Lead to infection.
Yet at times I hear the moon
Singing its keen crescent song,
And I find myself
Asking if I can still say
?I am not a doll.?


AN: I've read a lot of Eva fanfiction; this is influenced by it all.

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Mon Oct 25, 2004 5:54 pm
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Never been much of a poetry writer...to me it's just writing with more rules! However, I do enjoy good poetry. This is excellent work (the end gave me chills). Keep writing; don't let your talent go to waste!

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Mon Oct 25, 2004 7:19 pm
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Nice one. Really, really nice. :)

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Tue Oct 26, 2004 10:38 am
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Very good. Any more on tap?


Tue Oct 26, 2004 11:46 pm
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pretty good, all in all. And like Michael said, any more?

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